WALT: Know the movie making process. The best thing about the movie is trying to shoot the possums. In my Next move I will try speak louder. I in joyed been in the move. I learnt how to make a movie on I movie.
Tuesday, 5 September 2017
WALT proof-read our work to make improvements
WALT use descriptive words and phrases to help us add interesting detail to our recounts
To be successful we will:
- Use words and phrases that describe what things looked like
- What sounds we could have been heard
- What we could have smelled
- What we could have felt inside (try use class examples of ‘showing’ the feeling
On Sunday morning I wearily get out of bed and headed to work.
At 5:00 am I walk into the factory.There were a lot of boxes and it smelt like poo it was a pigsty.If I work hard I can probably can go to school.I wish I can save up my money and come and live up here.I said in an exhausted way.The next day I was late my boss said to me you're not having lunch I said man my boss said now no pay he said no now next next week no pay. So I walked to my apartment and I said to ching am I going to stay here forever. Ching said yes you might like jake I don’t want to stay here with my dum boss because he makes front of me so once he was my Friend. And he will pay me the most I had enuf to go to school I shouted love it!. I was walking on the smelly stairs and shouted! Love you boss.